Any thoughts on this poem?

You have the makings of a good poem there, but it requires some effort on you part. Keep the thoughts, and search for words that will p on the same thoughts but with rhyme, and flow. English is a prodigious language, and the words are there. Like everything else, poetry needs effort and application. And avoid words like 'rhadamanthine'. They are not just bersome, but pretentious and unnecessary. By the way, the spellchecker highlights it as wrong and suggests three alternatives: Damnation, badmouthing, and readmitting. That was quite funny.